Monday, June 23, 2014

The New Query

So after doing the heavy revision, I had to rewrite the original query letter.  It wasn't that the query letter was bad, it was just inaccurate to the new draft.  I've posted it below just for the sake of semi-transparency.  It's a fairly standard query, but it's received some requests for fulls, and that's all that matters, right?

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Dear ________,

Seventeen-year-old Max Lewis may be a high school nobody, but he’s also a heist film expert who’s memorized their strategies, tactics, and cons.  It’s a good thing, too, because Max has just been framed by the mysterious Chaos Club for vandalizing the town water tower.  Humiliated and angry, Max does what any budding mastermind with nothing to lose would do--he plots payback.

Using his heist film knowledge, Max recruits a crew made up four other prank victims to form The Water Tower 5.  The goal?  Destroy the Chaos Club.  But how do you eliminate an organization with an anonymous membership capable of trapping cows on the school roof and assembling stolen desks into a giant phallus on the football field?  By relying on what Max does best--scheming, scamming, and swindling.

The Water Tower 5 draws the Chaos Club out of hiding by implicating them in a series of pranks involving precision vomiting and R-rated pictures of the school mascot.   But it’s not like the Chaos Club is just going to let a bunch of nobodies take them down without a fight.  Soon, Max finds himself arrested, suspended, and even worse, dealing with an angry girlfriend.  With summer only days away, can Max devise a caper ingenious enough to clear his name and expose the Chaos Club?  (Hint: Possibly, but it’s going to take a hell of a lot of weather balloons.)

THE WATER TOWER 5 is a contemporary YA novel (81,000 words) combining the underdog qualities of Frank Porter’s King Dork, the offbeat relationships of The Breakfast Club, and the capers of Ocean’s 11.  My short fiction has appeared in numerous print publications including 2010’s The Year’s Best Dark Fantasy and Horror.

Thank you for your time and consideration,

Sincerely,
Kurt Dinan

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